First of all I want to explain you
why I chose this topic to write reflection. What I find interesting is despite
the common belief in Turkey not every young adult in USA doesn't leave their
parent's house. This process in USA goes similar to how it goes in Turkey according
to the passage I read.
I somehow agree with the idea of
staying with parents may be beneficial economically but it is beneficial just
economically not psychologically or in some other aspects of life. The passage
says that quite a few individuals staying with their parents are happy and
doing this voluntarily. They are staying with their parent because they need
extra money or they get divorced. When life gets hard the only thing seeming
right and convenient is going to your mummy’s warm arms sometimes. However,
according to my opinion it is not the right choice. The ones having hard times in
their lives have to learn to deal with the troubles they have.
We always think that the things
about leaving someone his or her parents’ home is different from the things in
Turkey. However, the passage shows us the opposite. According to this passage most
of the single people are living with their parents surprisingly. As I mentioned
before there are more hazardous effects of staying with parents than positive
effects.
First of all, situation which forces you to
staying with your parents affects your psychological condition. In addition to
this hardship, add your parents’ behaviours limiting your freedom and demanding
to live according to their thoughts. I
assume that this condition may lead someone more deeper psychological problem
more than the hardship you came across before moving out your parents’ home.
Secondly, I want to mention further
effects of living with parents on someone. In my opinion this situation makes
cause to lose someone his or her self-confidence because this situation shows
that you can’t make it on your own. Also if we think about it deep down it may
even lead to depression. 
Hi Sahra,
YanıtlaSilFirstly, the reason why I'm writing to this entry is the topic that you've chosen. I also wrote a journal about this topic. It's quite interesting and maybe unusual for some of us. I liked the way you start the entry. You mentioned the reason of chosing this topic, and explained yourself quite well. I liked your organizations of paragraphs as well. It's flowing and very rich in terms of using language.
Firstly, I want to draw your attention to very little grammatic errors. In the third para, you should use "are" instead of "is" I think because of the plurality of the subject "the things". In the 4th para, the word order should be like this: "lead someone do(experience) sth", "lead to sth". These small mistakes are the all I could catch. Nevertheless, you have a very sufficient grammar competency. I completely agree with you in this writing, and I should definitely say that I enjoyed very much while reading your article reflection.